This review was written by the Beautiful and Angst Lovin' Snshyne
The Gentleman from Washington State
Original Author's Description: Senator Edward Cullen is the handsome scion of the Cullen family. A playboy's playboy, he is taken with an intern in his office, Bella Swan. She is untouchable for many reasons, and he's in a tough re-election battle with Jacob Black. AH,M Adult Content
The Gentleman from Washington State drives me crazy! It's been a while since I started a fic that I need to read the update the day it hits my inbox and I do with this one for three reasons: 1) She updates 2-3 times a week and I don't want them to get backed up; 2) I read a lot of fic on my iPhone and her updates are of a manageable length to read on the go (3K to 7K words); and 3) I seriously, seriously need to know what happens next.
I'm pretty sure I have never wanted an Edward and a Bella to get together so badly in all my fic reading days. And I think this is entirely due to their forbidden circumstances. Edward Cullen is a highly intelligent, well rounded, respected, gorgeous Democratic Senator representing Washington state in DC. At 17 he entered the US Naval Academy. Upon graduating at 21 he spends 7 years as a Navy SEAL (thud), then attends Yale Law School where he graduates and moves on to be an assistant District Attorney. Sadly, he is also known for his philandering ways with women. And while it's generally not scandalous, it does make a girl that is serious about a relationship question getting into one with him. Although Edward had always planned to pursue a Senate position, his quick rise to the Senate seat he now holds was due to the special election held as a result of the untimely death of his father, Senator Carlisle Cullen. Now, at thirty-two, Edward finds himself pitched against another resident from Forks for the upcoming Senate election - Jacob Black, Republican. This is also a good place to point out that this fic pretty much gives me free license to rationally hate Jacob Black and not even bother to have to explain my reasoning. I've given you one reason, you'll have to read to figure out the others.
Cue Bella Swan. Resident of Forks, Democratic Philosophy major, working on her thesis and studying for the LSAT in her senior year of college. She is a University of Washington student, but will spend her Senior Year at Georgetown in a sort of matriculation program and she is now an intern for Senator Cullen complete with a blue dress (please tell me you got that). In this story, Bella is innocent to a degree, but not naive. She has a good head on her shoulders and is capable of reasoning and making her own decisions, but she still has a lot to learn about the world. Immediately, Edward is intrigued by her. He finds her beautiful, but also intelligent and that's what really turns him on about her. He finds himself inexplicably drawn to her. Wanting to talk to her and get to actually know more about her. Turns out, they have a lot in common other than where they are from.
My favorite thing about this fic is that the author, Betty Smith, has taken Canon Edward's mind reading and translated it into Senator Edward Cullen's astute political prowess. The way he can make eye contact with someone and know what they are trying to convey. Or the fact that he can read a person and know how he should respond to convey what he means without being able to come outright and be direct with it is something I find very fascinating.
Here comes your angst factor: Edward is a sitting Senator, Bella is a college student and his intern, Edward is not the only man to notice how enticing Bella is, Bella has a past with Jacob Black and Chief Swan holds some of the Cullens' secrets in his lockbox that could possibly wreak havoc on Senator Cullen's campaign. I would also like to say that for once, I am glad Edward is not the black sheep of the family. It's nice to read him in a light where he is revered and not in a position where even his family has given up on him and the only one who sees any redeeming value in him is Bella.
This fic is a tangled web and Bella is the pretty, but deadly Black Widow spider.
• The link to the story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5720172/1/The_Gentleman_from_Washington_State
• The Twitter link: http://twitter.com/MissBettySmith
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You know AngryBadgerGirl from "The Naked Guy Upstairs" (TNGUS) and you know LittleSecret84 most recently from "The Brown Study" and also "Age of Consent". Well, these two authors just happen to be friends and I asked them to do a little interview for us. They decided the best way to do that was on G-Chat. It turned out to be a funny and enjoyable way to get to know these two lovely ladies...
AngryBadgerGirl
LittleSecret84
(her name is Serene)
ABG calls her Ser
AngryBadgerGirl: Hello!
Ser: Hey!
AngryBadgerGirl: Okay, let’s start.
Ser: Okay.
Ser: (crickets chirping)
AngryBadgerGirl: You mentioned doing word association. I like that idea.
Ser: We can see if it turns out funny. Also, people asked if we’re going to be interviewing each other as enemies.
AngryBadgerGirl: LOL, why?
Ser: I don’t know why they think we don’t like each other. Who knows?!
AngryBadgerGirl: Well, since we’re Turk/Armenian we should maybe start fighting at some point? You know, to keep shit real?
Ser: Ha, of course!
AngryBadgerGirl: Hello, and thank you for reading this. You probably don’t know why you are, and honestly, I don’t know why you are, either. Ser would probably agree.
Ser: I’m pretty sure there’s no one here but us.
AngryBadgerGirl: Well, not now.
Ser: Ha ha, I meant whoever’s going to read this. :P
AngryBadgerGirl: But maybe when this gets enbloggerated or whatever?
Ser: Anyway, I do agree.
AngryBadgerGirl: Sandy will have to because it’s her blog, and I feel badly for her already.
Ser: Hi, Sandy! There, we have reached out to our entire audience.
AngryBadgerGirl: Indeed! So Ser…you are LittleSecret84.
Ser: Uh huh.
AngryBadgerGirl: And you are currently writing Brown Study.
Ser: You could say that.
AngryBadgerGirl: Where did you get the idea for your story? Such a fucking boring question! Sorry.
Ser: Eh, what can you do? You know all the exciting things about me.
AngryBadgerGirl: Trufax.
Ser: Um, I have no idea! I was finishing up my first story, and I knew I wanted to write a story that takes place when both Bella and Edward are teenagers. I also thought it would be interesting to give Bella a gift in an AH story. The rest just came to me as I started writing ideas down. I could go into more detail, but that would bore you.
AngryBadgerGirl: No, please, I love being bored! And for the really, really uninformed and obviously lacking in any awareness of what’s going on around them, explain the premise and what Bella’s gift is exactly.
Ser: You mean not everyone reads my story? I’m hurt.
AngryBadgerGirl: IT IS A NATIONAL TRAGEDY.
Ser: I KNOW, RIGHT?
AngryBadgerGirl: I weep for you.
Ser: Clearly, they’re too busy reading mediocre stuff. But I digress. Bella has dreams. She refers to herself as “sorta-psychic,” but most of her dreams are about a man.
AngryBadgerGirl: Yes, they are reading mediocre stuff. Crap like TNGUS.
Ser: Yes, precisely. TNGUS. I hear the author has a nice rack.
AngryBadgerGirl: What a piece of shit that story is! But go on about Brown Study. So, Bella dreams about her dreamboat…
Ser: Bella knows that her dreams are visions of her future, and this man is beautiful, he loves her, he wears a hat. Are we done? Can we talk about the Naked Guy now?
AngryBadgerGirl: No, because I need to talk about how big Hat Guy’s dick is. Because that’s all that matters.
Ser: Obvi. But sadly, we’re not there yet in the story.
AngryBadgerGirl: Wuuuuuuut? They need to fuck already!
Ser: Yes, nine chapters in, and nothing wet has met anything hard.
AngryBadgerGirl: PSHAW! You’re going to make them develop feelings and shit, aren’t you?
Ser: I plan on keeping my current readers and acquiring new ones by dragging out the so-called “UST” until Edward finally gives in, and Bella spreads her legs. Promptly after this takes place, there will be a misunderstanding of epic proportions. Edward will do something extremely douchey. But we will forgive him to get to the green eyed, brown-haired babies in the epilogue. Now are we done?
AngryBadgerGirl: Nooooo! Is the douchey part necessary?
Ser: Always! Have you never read fan fiction before?
AngryBadgerGirl: You know how I’m allergic to douches!
Ser: You’re just not deep enough to understand them, ABG.
AngryBadgerGirl: Non sequitur: I’m drinking $3 red wine through a straw right now.
Ser: Klassy!
AngryBadgerGirl: Look, I gotta drink the wine just to cope.
Ser: They’ve been through so much. The pain, the suffering...they are too complex for you to comprehend.
AngryBadgerGirl: The angst is killing me!
Ser: I know! Talking to the likes of me must really suck for you.
AngryBadgerGirl: It’s fucking raining angst around here.
Ser: Where are you? I see no angst.
AngryBadgerGirl: Where am I where? LMAO
Ser: Relax, darling. After angst we get rainbows and sex. Or angsty sex—my favorite.
AngryBadgerGirl: Your questions are confusing and frightening me! I’m like Unfrozen Caveman Lawyer.
Ser: Must you flaunt your various degrees from institutions of higher education?
AngryBadgerGirl: YESH! No one would believe it otherwise. I’ll send you a fax of my degree or scan it or whatever.
Ser: It’s really tacky, ABG. I mean, it’s like me telling everyone about my MA in Middle Eastern Studies and my JD from a pretty awesome law school.
AngryBadgerGirl: ORLY? Such a liar. I bet you were 15 when you went to college too, huh?
Ser: Sixteen. But anyway...
AngryBadgerGirl: OMG, you couldn’t manage it by 15? How sad for you.
Ser: :( Yes, just like I’ll never manage to have 10,000 reviews. It’s a tragedy.
AngryBadgerGirl: A NATIONAL TRAGEDY.
Ser: I download KStew gifs and smoke a lot of weed to cope. It’s a difficult life. A painful existence.
AngryBadgerGirl: You do what you gotta do, bb. I drink $3 wine and pop Klonopins like they’re Flintstones vitamins.
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh hey, word association!!!
Ser: Yummy. I loved those vitamins! Oh yes. Let’s.
AngryBadgerGirl: Let’s play word association! I’m SPAZZING RIGHT NOW! Okay, you start.
Ser: Okay. Here’s one: leaf
AngryBadgerGirl: ROB’S PENIS
Ser: Kristen’s vag
AngryBadgerGirl: BONG WATER
Ser: Dirty
AngryBadgerGirl: ROB’S PENIS?
Ser: Ser’s mouth
AngryBadgerGirl: ROB’S PENIS
Ser: TomStu
AngryBadgerGirl: ROB. AND HIS PENIS.
Ser: GOD!!
AngryBadgerGirl: Okay, my turn.
Ser: Okay.
AngryBadgerGirl: Tarantula
Ser: Scary
AngryBadgerGirl: Vampire
Ser: Count Chocula
AngryBadgerGirl: FOLDS
Ser: Wet
AngryBadgerGirl: Cock milking
Ser: ABG’s avi of a girl milking a rooster
AngryBadgerGirl: Ministrations…I feel like we’re playing $10,000 Pyramid… “CLICHÉS YOU READ IN FANFIC!”
Ser: Let’s just say Rob’s penis a lot, or Edward’s, rather.
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh, it’s magical.
Ser: Edward’s is clean and beautiful and it twitches all the time.
AngryBadgerGirl: Just the word ‘penis’ is good enough. PEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEENIS
Ser: Ew. Wow, I can’t believe I just ‘ew’d’ peen.
AngryBadgerGirl: What, it scares you now?!? Are you feeling okay?
Ser: I’m not sure. Do you think people have flounced this interview by now?
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh my God, if they ever even started, they’re long gone.
Ser: Okay, ABG. Four letter word that best describes you.
AngryBadgerGirl: GOOF.
Ser: LMAO
AngryBadgerGirl: For sure. I always keeeeeed. I’m never serious.
Ser: Never, ever?
AngryBadgerGirl: No, it’s overrated.
Ser: It goes back to your lack of depth, which we covered above.
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh, I am so shallow.
Ser: You and your fluff!
AngryBadgerGirl: Except my girl bits...Edbert, that’s the only deep part of me. Can we pretend he’s reading this?
Ser: Edward or Rob?
AngryBadgerGirl: SAME DIFF.
Ser: RIGHT, I FORGOT! SAME PERSON. Okay. But first, I must say something.
AngryBadgerGirl: Say it, out loud.
Ser: Get your filthy long fingers off my woman, motherfucker. Okay, I’m done.
AngryBadgerGirl: I thought you were talking to me and I was very confused.
Ser: No, but let’s discuss fan fiction, shall we?
AngryBadgerGirl: Yeah, yeah okay.
Ser: Who are your favorite Bella and Edward?
AngryBadgerGirl: Ack, I have a bunch.
Ser: First: the ones you wrote. Second: the ones you’ve read.
AngryBadgerGirl: Aw, come on. Don’t make me sound like a jackass.
Ser: No need to explain yours.
AngryBadgerGirl: My own? Do I have to?
Ser: Just name them.
AngryBadgerGirl: TNGUS and Prunella.
Ser: Yeah, dude. No explanations of why they’re awesome needed. And the rest?
AngryBadgerGirl: Fave of other fics? Damn, I can’t name just one pair.
Ser: Not a pair...random Bella and Edward
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh, okay. Well, I LOVE Rebelward from Dead Confederates. Like, to an absurd degree.
Ser: Yes, you always have great things to say about that story.
AngryBadgerGirl: It’s just so different in style and tone. The narration uses a lot of southern colloquialism. Just different and cool. I also love the Bella from Falling for the First Time. She’s very geeky, but what’s great about her is that she guesses Edward is a vampire straight away—the minute she meets him, because she’s a geek and loves sci-fi/fantasy.
Ser: Ha ha, that’s pretty awesome!
AngryBadgerGirl: She thinks it’s cool as shit that he’s a vamp.
Ser: Okay, has reading fan fiction ever made you cry? Like, bawling, real tears, your soul has been ripped apart?
AngryBadgerGirl: Yes, not often, but yes. Poughkeepsie made me cry.
Ser: Awwwwww. You love hobos.
AngryBadgerGirl: Yes, yes I do. What about you? Who are your faves?
Ser: Hmmmm. Well, they change constantly.
AngryBadgerGirl: I hate to make you choose between Brown Study and Age of Consent but I’m gonna make you.
Ser: Oh, I can’t.
AngryBadgerGirl: YOU MUST!
Ser: Uch. Okay. Age of Consent.
AngryBadgerGirl: YES. I wanted you to say that!
Ser: I don’t know the other Bella well enough yet.
AngryBadgerGirl: It’s not because I don’t adore Brown Study, but because I just LOVE the love story in Age of Consent.
Ser: It’s like a real romance.
AngryBadgerGirl: Yes, it is.
Ser: I like writing crap like that. But as for the rest of the Bellas and Edwards, at the moment, I’m obsessed with Bella in Just Wait.
AngryBadgerGirl: I haven’t read that but I am familiar with the story BECAUSE YOU CRY TO ME ABOUT IT ALL THE TIME.
Ser: And Edward from Burn and Shine, as well as Edward from Hydraulic Level 5 (although I gave him the side-eye a few times while reading the last chapter).
AngryBadgerGirl: I’m here to wipe your tears, Ser.
Ser: I know. My tears and nasty mascara. But my dear friend who-shall-not-be-named writes my favorite “Edward” ever, and he’s not really an Edward, but he’s wonderful. I WANT YOU TO READ ANGST, ABG!
AngryBadgerGirl: I can’t, my real life is angsty enough. I laugh to keep from cryin, bb.
Ser: OMG wait! WAIT. REWIND.
AngryBadgerGirl: Rewind what?
Ser: MY FAVORITE EDWARD…IS FIFTY…HOW COULD I FORGET?!?
AngryBadgerGirl: OMG, YES!
Ser: Fuck!
AngryBadgerGirl: HE IS GONNA SPANK THE SHIT OUT OF YOU FOR NEGLECTING TO MENTION HIM. Just sayin.
Ser: Oh, the Red Room of Pain awaits...my poor bum.
AngryBadgerGirl: You better bend over and take it, woman.
Ser: Honestly, I think Fifty is really struggling, but at least in their love-making he has become quite tender.
AngryBadgerGirl: Awww. I don’t read it, but it’s on my list. So, he doesn’t need to swat Bella’s backside all the time?
Ser: Not at all, and it’s actually very sweet. He just knows that in order to keep her, he has to accept the fact that she is not a sub. And he’s at least willing to try, which is a huge step.
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh hey, we’re supposed to be interviewing each other. More specifically, you’re supposed to be interviewing me. Allow me to showcase how big of a pretentious ass I am. As I recline upon my settee, I ruminate over where this fantastical voyage known as fan fiction writing will take me. Oh, to channel the muses when I put quill to parchment!
Ser: Um...la la laaaa. How about you ask me something important and deep?
AngryBadgerGirl: Lemme think. Okay, when you write a story, what is the most important thing you want to come across in your writing?
Ser: Kristen has great legs? :( Sorry, it’s difficult for me to think about anything...difficult.
AngryBadgerGirl: LOL. You asked for a deep question!
Ser: I write in the first person, and in present tense—like you. I want the reader to feel like they are in Bella’s head. Sometimes she describes nothing, and all we get are her thoughts. What she sees and does describe must be important, because why think about it consciously? I just want to write like she thinks, and I want to get her personality and mood and emotions across to the reader. Now send that to our wonderful beta and tell her to make it look pretty. :P
AngryBadgerGirl: Ha ha. Oh, Neeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeena! Honestly, I doubt even she’s reading this.
Ser: Probably not. Okay. What’s your favorite part of the whole process? Of writing a story?
AngryBadgerGirl: Hmm. Actually not such a tough question for me.
Ser: I wasn’t trying to give you a tough one. I’ll do that next.
AngryBadgerGirl: Because to be honest, there’s only one thing I think I can do well, and that’s write dialog. I hear the characters talk in my head. I picture them in certain scenarios and write down the exchanges that they have.
Ser: You do an amazing job writing dialog.
AngryBadgerGirl: Thanks. It’s my favorite part because it is the easiest for me, and I’m lazy like that. When I started TNGUS, this scene just popped into my head. What would happen if a really uptight girl moved into a new place and her neighbor was this major playboy? But the first thing I thought of was her seeing him naked and being appalled.
Ser: Poor Bella.
AngryBadgerGirl: Well, it’s humor at her expense, unfortunately, because her reaction is...ya know…funny.
Ser: Well, yes. You wrote it!
AngryBadgerGirl: Eh, I don’t look at it like that.
Ser: If you did, you’d kinda be a conceited ass. :P
AngryBadgerGirl: Heh heh. True! I just write funny situations with people saying funny things to each other.
Ser: Okay, I think we should ask questions that will be VERY difficult to answer. Like, you should put me on the spot and make me squirm.
AngryBadgerGirl: Alright, this is a touchy one. Why do you think people keep harping on the age difference in Age of Consent? Can you see why people latch onto that? Does it bother you when they refer to that Edward as Pedoward?
Ser: Well, pedofic is disgusting, and they automatically assume that if Bella is under eighteen, any relationship between her and Edward (an adult) is illegal.
AngryBadgerGirl: Right, but didn’t the same thing happen in the original saga?
Ser: Oh NO. Edward was frozen in time! He was seventeen!
AngryBadgerGirl: Uhhh, he didn’t act 17. He acted like my grandpa.
Ser: People always ask me why I chose a ten-year age difference, and why I don’t go back and edit that part. The difference is that big for a reason. Does it squick you out? It should just a little bit—but ultimately, I wanted to see if people understood that he loves her as an equal. And no, it doesn’t bother me at all! I call him Pedoward all the time. Most of the people who call him that do so affectionately.
AngryBadgerGirl: I mean I think the whole point of the age difference in your story is that sometimes age really is just a number. What matters is how compatible people are emotionally and intellectually.
Ser: In canon, Edward is seventeen, but acts older. You made a great point. The way Bella accepts everything he says/does really bothers me. In Age of Consent, Edward TRIES to make decisions for her a few times, and is immediately shot down.
AngryBadgerGirl: Oh in the original saga, he acts like he is way superior to her, in many instances.
Ser: I wanted to show that SMeyer didn’t have to make Bella the weaker one.
AngryBadgerGirl: I think a lot of good fic writers make the effort to craft a Bella who is a person in her own right.
Ser: If my Bella had acted like canon Bella, I wouldn’t let her NEAR twenty-six year old Edward. I don’t think he’d be as into her. Okay, I have a question for you. If you had to rec one VAMP story, what would it be?
AngryBadgerGirl: Hmmm—tough one. I’d probably say La canzone della Bella Cigna by philadelphic. It’s really well written.
Ser: Yes, people love La canzone. She’s a great writer.
AngryBadgerGirl: Do you have one all-time favorite story? Not just vamp, but any genre?
Ser: Yes—Tropic of Virgo. She’s a poet. It’s so beautiful. And Spark and Pretty Boy are wonderful. It’s almost magical, reading it. It has my favorite lemons, too. And the sweetness kills me. Another story that is equally wonderful is HL5—but I won’t even get into that one now. You’d be comforting me and drying my tears again.
AngryBadgerGirl: I’m here for you, sweetie. You know that.
Ser: I’m here for YOU.
AngryBadgerGirl: For me? Lil ole me?
Ser: Well, most of the time... ;)
AngryBadgerGirl: Yeah, well, whenever you can pencil me in, I’d appreciate it.
Ser: LOL! Mwah!
AngryBadgerGirl: Right back atcha.
Ser: I’m sleepy. And hungry.
AngryBadgerGirl: I’m sleepy, but eating dinner. Hey, I think we covered a lot of ground. Maybe we should shut up now.
Ser: Yes. Leave the readers with a few wise words from the great ABG.
AngryBadgerGirl: Erp. Okay, people. Don’t hate me, but I think angst is overrated. Read and write more stories about the how great it can be to fall in love, and how happy it can make people, because that’s what life is all about—trying to be happy. God, that was trite and stupid.
Ser: :D An important message, indeed.
AngryBadgerGirl: What are your wise words?
Ser: Save your hard earned dollars and don’t see Remember Me next week—save those dollars for The Runaways, instead. In five years everyone will ask, “Rob who?” (Goodbye, followers!)
AngryBadgerGirl: LOL. Wait, I have more wise words.
Ser: Go on…
AngryBadgerGirl: ROB’S PENIS
Ser: Yes, let’s give a HUGE round of applause for the TRUE STAR of this fandom.
AngryBadgerGirl: ROB’S PENIS
Ser: Aaaand we’re out.
AngryBadgerGirl: BYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYE! Wait, how do I save this thing?
Ser: Er.
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This review was written by the funny and delightfully beautiful 107yearoldvirgin
I would say that this sums it up, but that would be a lie. This is obviously a vamp story, and our Edward is nicknamed Bitey here. Because this Edward actually wants a taste of his Bella Swan, in more ways than one. Which is what makes this story so multi-layered that it makes me never want to stop reading.
Laid Bare is a little gem in the Vamp Fic darkness. What I love most about this story is that Brit23 writes beautifully, and the voice that she gives Edward is incredible. You can still believe that he is a tortured, emo, 90 something year old vampire who has never done the deed. He’s self-loathing and tormented, but in this story, he knows that the place he belongs most in this world is with Bella. And he will do what it takes to make it work.
That’s right, readers. No pansy-ass Eddie here.
This Bella is living a double life of ‘perfect daughter’ for Charlie, and Rez Boy groupie on the weekends. It’s clear from the start that she is not even vaguely aware of who she really is. But once she and Edward meet and partake…in each other…her purpose is revealed and her whole life suddenly makes sense:
“He pushed his head harder against mine and I winced, running my fingertips along his temple. "Easy," I soothed, urging him to lift his forehead from mine. His frantic eyes met mine, like he was desperate to make sure I was okay. "I'm fine. Just….God…keep fucking me, just like this," I moaned, clawing at his back in a frenzied attempt to get him closer, and knowing if he did, my body would be crushed into nothing. I realized this would be the sweet torture of giving myself to him…never knowing what it felt like for him fully let go. I couldn't think about it now. I just wanted to close my eyes and feel the coolness of his body sliding inside me, gliding on top of me, squeezing me tightly. He soothed me to the very depths of my soul. I groaned unevenly as he placed soft kisses on my bite over and over, shaking as the tingling sensation of his venom spread across my body. This was the closest to heaven I'd ever get…and probably the closest to hell, but it didn't matter anymore.
I listened to the steady breathing of the boy, the man, the monster above me, fighting with himself in order to keep me safe. Forfeiting to his conscience in his need for me. Nothing made sense…fucking nothing did. I needed him like the sky needed the sun and the moon needed the stars. The realization was horrifying. It was life-altering. I began trembling violently against him, a deep sob building in my chest and threatening to burst its way through. I didn't know myself anymore. I don't cry like this, I don't fucking feel with this intensity and smolder with this life. But if I didn't know me anymore, then why was I alive for the first time? Why did I feel more comfortable in my own skin than I ever had before? Why did I look at my body in the mirror and feel like I was beautiful? Why was this happening to me?”
Brit weaves a lovely tale of love, desperation and a lot of naked times in her story that leave me thinking, and riled up, ready for an update. If you are a fan of vampire fics, then you’ll want to try this one out. And even if you’re not a huge fan of Vamp Edward, you may just change your MO for this one. I know I did.
Caution: This story is heavily steeped in sex, there is a bit of drug use and the characters are in High School. None of these things should deter you from heading over and checking this out, though. You should read for beautiful little moments like this:
“This morning was a beautiful space of contradiction, bright sun and dark clouds making the atmosphere seem unworldly and mysterious. Placid raindrops fell from the sky, the air heavy with the smell of moisture and comfort. I curled up on the floor against my open window, folding my arms on the sill and watching in wonderment as the beads slapped against the wooden frame and splattered across my skin. I smiled and lifted my eyes to the sky, shaking my head as the thin purple clouds moved rapidly, as if staying another moment in this environment was too much to bear. The dark blue sky of morning lay underneath, promising a rare and beautiful day. I squinted as the bright orange sun shed blinding light over the tops of the trees, making the world ignite in vibrant colors of yellow, pink, and blue. It was breathtaking.”
Those are the descriptions and paragraphs that leave me in awe of Brit23’s beautiful imagery and storytelling abilities. I hope you’ll give it a try and that you agree.
FF link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5541886/1/Laid_Bare
Brit on Twitter: http://twitter.com/brits23
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This review was written by the Beautiful and Angst Lovin' Snshyne
